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Squares - Stay
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Hi, this song is a collaboration between me and Sean Grocott who wrote the lyrics. Have a listen and leave your feedback Smile
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First of all, welcome to SuperWerer. Have fun in promoting your content. :mrgreen:

The voice is a little young, but he hits the right notes and the overall voice quality is appropriate.
There are some noise disturbances though that can easily be cut out.
Maybe it's me, but I would put more reverb onto the voice and the instruments.
It's also a little monotonous, maybe more background instruments could help.

I hope I could help you in here, since I'm not that experienced in this genre but I liked to give my thoughts Wink
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<QUOTE author="Army of Aurora" post_id="6990" time="1535492435" user_id="525">
Army of Aurora post_id=6990 time=1535492435 user_id=525 Wrote:First of all, welcome to SuperWerer. Have fun in promoting your content. :mrgreen:

The voice is a little young, but he hits the right notes and the overall voice quality is appropriate.
There are some noise disturbances though that can easily be cut out.
Maybe it's me, but I would put more reverb onto the voice and the instruments.
It's also a little monotonous, maybe more background instruments could help.

I hope I could help you in here, since I'm not that experienced in this genre but I liked to give my thoughts Wink
</QUOTE>

Hi, thanks for taking time to listen to the track Smile. I will definitely take your tips into consideration. I'm still new to working with vocals though.
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<QUOTE author="AhmedGuem" post_id="7107" time="1535579012" user_id="1026">
AhmedGuem post_id=7107 time=1535579012 user_id=1026 Wrote:<QUOTE author="Army of Aurora" post_id="6990" time="1535492435" user_id="525">
Army of Aurora post_id=6990 time=1535492435 user_id=525 Wrote:First of all, welcome to SuperWerer. Have fun in promoting your content. :mrgreen:

The voice is a little young, but he hits the right notes and the overall voice quality is appropriate.
There are some noise disturbances though that can easily be cut out.
Maybe it's me, but I would put more reverb onto the voice and the instruments.
It's also a little monotonous, maybe more background instruments could help.

I hope I could help you in here, since I'm not that experienced in this genre but I liked to give my thoughts Wink
</QUOTE>

Hi, thanks for taking time to listen to the track Smile. I will definitely take your tips into consideration. I'm still new to working with vocals though.
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So this is one of your first songs? If so, you did pretty good. Keep it up, good luck. Big Grin
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Hey, welcome! I agree with a lot of Aurora said, but I'll put it in my own words too. First of all, because of the lack of instruments, I can hear the hiss from the microphone. Also I hear when you some parts where the vocals clip from S sounds. Do you mix your vocals and all that? I like vocals that follow a melody. Honestly starting at 1:35, things feel a little weird time wise. I like that lead melody, I'm really tired of the main piano by now though. The bass is really booming, it's nice. This section was so short though, and then it's just back to the main piano lick. That's the verse technically, and I think that's a bad decision personally. It's just too sparse, there's not enough going on to capture interest. There are a couple vocal hiccups here and there, and you definitely sound very young so I'd like to commend you on pursuing on music at a young age. It's very admirable. For the most part dude, you're like on pitch -- there were a handful of times where you were flat, but it's totally excusable given the quality. I don't think the ending is good at all, it feels very disjointed. Also when that chorus comes in, I was just reminded of how off time it feels.
0:22 - 1:12 is the first verse. That's really long for something with literally just one instrument playing a lick over and over. The verse definitely needs work, but keep it up man! Thanks for sharing.
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